Comments on rough draft

i think this is a really good rough draft for a paper because it is very detailed but clear at the same time and not much is missing. You should just add more sources. Good job! to Kiana

Yurelis- your rough draft is pretty good because everything is organized and i can follow your thoughts well-they aren't jumbled everywhere. I think you could have added some more info to each paragraph and shown other points of view to like an opposing viewpoint. Good Job! -Juliette